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(non-canon) Survivor Shy - Into the Bazaar by Mattatatta (non-canon) Survivor Shy - Into the Bazaar by Mattatatta
"After days of following a gang of looting Diamond Dogs from just above the cloud cover, they finally revealed the entrance to their underground home. I marked the entrance on my map and waited patiently for the Dogs to disappear from view, and silently glided down from the clouds, landing at the mouth of the cave entrance.

"Watching the gang of Diamond Dogs scout around a part of Fillydelphia, kicking their way inside shops and homes, throwing sentimental but worthless possessions onto the streets while taking whatever valuables they could find, I began to grow more and more upset. They didn't care that something awful had happened to the ponies who had lived there, and they didn't care about the damage they caused to those desolate homes and empty streets. If it meant a profit to them, they didn't care if they robbed from the dead cities.

"My patience was wearing thin, and I felt sick through the amount of anger I was containing. And as I looked inside the dimly lit caves, hearing the sounds of the triumphant Dogs returning home with their loot, I felt myself begin to reach my boiling point. In the back of my mind, I could hear a voice begging for me to calm down before I went inside, but I banished it with a huff.

"I marched through the tunnels, following the sound of the Diamond Dogs I was following, soon choosing to follow the sound of civilisation as it became louder. I came up to large entrance, guarded by two Diamond Dogs in armour. As I approached, they rubbed their eyes in disbelief, and cautiously stepped forward to intercept me, spears held at the ready.

"Without a thought, I suddenly unfurled my wings and took to the air, quickly closing the distance between us, and caught the pair of them in a debilitating stare. Spears clanged to the floor, and the Dogs turned around and ran off. I dropped down onto my hooves, a sly smile creeping up on my face. Again, the voice in the back of my head piped up, reacting in abject terror. I pressed on, trying to cancel it out.

"I spotted signs pointing towards the marketplace, or bazaar as the Diamond Dogs had named it. As I followed the route, I came across another pair of guards. They ordered me to halt, and blocked the entrance to the bazaar. Like the guards before, I locked them into my gaze. The hairs on the back of their neck began to stick up, and I released them from my stare. They dropped to the floor and cowered and whimpered. I passed them and walked into the bazaar, passing bemused goats, sheep, and even cows who had witnessed the scene.

"The voice in my head started pleading to me, 'Stop! You're hurting them! You're going to get into serious trouble and get thrown into a dungeon before you even find where an Element of Harmony is being kept!'

"I hesitated and thought for a moment, I needed to find the Elements, and staring down every Diamond Dog I met wasn't going to help my cause, even if they had deeply offended me. But what they had done was wrong, so very wrong, wasn't I right to be hurt and angry?

"I spotted a stand selling jewellery, and started making my way towards it to ask if the trader had seen a necklace like mine. I watched the Diamond Dog behind the table casually reach behind him and lift a dagger off a crate, and attempt to hide it behind his back. He was expecting trouble, even if he was wearing a big, toothy grin like he was.

"I propped my forehooves on the table and lifted myself up to his level as best as I could. My mind carried on arguing for me to calm down and to not do anything sudden, especially since the trader was prepared, and hiding his eyes behind a squint.

"'How may I help you, pony? Looking for something? A nice, shiny, gemstone, hmm?" He greeted cheerfully, clearly a master salesdog.

"I could hear a commotion behind me, which only meant approaching guards. I stared blankly at the trader, and began to lose my anger and think clearly instead. It was probably too late to make amends now, but I had a moment to at least ask him what I wanted to know.

"I turned to my saddlebags and reached for the Element of Kindness, and was greeted by the sound of sharp weapons being drawn and pointed at me. Slowly, I pulled the Element out and placed it on my hoof, and looked up at the trader, who now had his dagger ready to defend himself with. He looked at the necklace oddly, unsure of what I was doing.

"I blinked a couple of times, clearing my vision and feeling my expression soften, and asked him. 'Have you seen any other necklaces like this one?'"


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EDIT: Image updated to correct poor depth and shading quality. Now the back ground pops out of the screen a bit more!

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Never offend Fluttershy on a deeply personal level. Never ever.

Here we go, though this was uploaded in the early hours of the 3rd of August, this counts as my 2nd of August post, so expect a brand new scene on the 4th.

This month I have challenged myself to come out with a new scene every two days, so that the story can make some ground and I can start getting into the habit of drawing a faster rate.

This scene went under a few revisions in the sketch stage, and eventually resulted in the first sketch being scrapped with a new one being started. I'm happy with this drawing, especially Fluttershy's expression. The only thing I wish I did better was all of the Diamond Dogs in this picture, since I'm very new to drawing them, and really struggled with them.

Writing for it was a challenge, since there was a lot I wanted to include, but simply didn't fit the narrative. I may end up revising the written part with a fresh pair of eyes, the grammar seems fine, but in my current state I'm not certain that the flow is very good.

Anyway, enjoy!
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DanRantsAndReviews Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol its Jake
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husk55 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013
Heh; Jake: The Wild Years.

Aha, There's a Cow! So all creatures with Hooves didn't dissapear like they did in End of Ponies.
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
For reasons that have nothing to do with the accidental Adventure Time reference, I'll be redrawing this picture in the future :P

I'm getting so many comparisons to End of Ponies nowadays lol I never actually got far when reading that. Now I don't want to read it in case I subconsciously use something
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RosyTheHedgeCat Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Student Interface Designer
Yay I am survivershy!And wait is that dog gonna kill m-me?.....
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reddragon122100 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Student General Artist
Its Jake the dog....
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grandmoonma Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
In this pic, Survivorshy reminds me of Gabrielle from Xena Warrior Princess.
She's just got that look about her
and Gabrielle was a peaceful bard, but threaten her or someone she loves, watch out
just me, but i see a similarity:)
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm not familiar with Xena Warrior Princess, but it does sound like you've made a good comparison between Fluttershy and one of the characters.

Fluttershy has a very volatile temper when it comes to being angered by something. For the most part she seems to control it very well, but if one is foolish enough to start pressing her berserk buttons, then they're soon going to wish they hadn't.
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cameronisadisaster Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can imagine her narrating this!
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks, I'm trying to write it that way.
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Detah-Ramet Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
...i am pretty sure that it is bad form to hold a knife behind your back, when the guards are less than 10 meters away, and the potential threat is clearly unarmed.
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wouldn't you be a little unsettled if you had just seen a pony reduce two guards to whimpering messes just by staring at them? I'd say the Dog is thinking he's massively underpowered right now lol
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Detah-Ramet Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
Well given that there is one in the back that didn't even flinch, probably not. But then again, i would probably hire a proper guard or two, rather than the local guard. Because clearly the local guard is incompetent.
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YourPrivateNightmare Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The diamon dog with the knife...looks like the dog from "Adventure Time" (I have no idea what his name is because I never watched that show)
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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I was hoping I was the only one who realised this. I didn't realise he had similar colouring to Jake the Dog until shortly after I submitted this.

Oh well
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DarthWill3 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Better watch out, Fluttershy.
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Or maybe the Diamond Dogs should watch out for Fluttershy
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DarthWill3 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah.

Perhaps they could always "fetchez la vache."
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, they do have cows living among them... So it's a possibile option, though Diamond Dogs don't strike me as French
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DarthWill3 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You know why I used that French phrase, right?
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
According to the interwebs, it's a monty python reference.
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DarthWill3 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yep. Wish I could see Fluttershy getting flattened by a catapulted cow.
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zaiali Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012
Fluttershy's face: b*tch gimme what I want!
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
She's a got a stare that is more terrifying than what can crawl out of the fifth layer of Tartarus! You better do what she says!
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FadingSkyLine Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
is it only me that thinks she looks totally awesoem in the pic, this is one of the reasons why shes my fav pony
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm glad you like it :)
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FadingSkyLine Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
hey but what happened to the other mane 6? and the princesses how did Equestria get in such a state and did she kill spike?! ( sorry curious )
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
All will be explained in the future updates.
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FadingSkyLine Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
DX NOOOOO
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconfluttershylaughplz:
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FadingSkyLine Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
the suspense is EVILL
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loftwinglover Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
lol flutters face
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is her "blind rage" face, and you see the way her pupils are 'eclipsing' the shine in her eyes? There's a Stare waiting to be unleashed, there.
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Nameleslight Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love it. The artwork is awesome, love the look on her face, and the story itself is maybe the best one you've written so far. Great flow, great action and rather funny. Awesome stuff. (I wrote that before I read that you wasn't sure about the flow, by the way.)
And how quickly you manage to put these out. I'm impressed!

One thing you might want to take a closer look at is the cave entrance. The way it is shadowed doesn't quite seem to give it depth. Maybe giving the shadowing inside the tunnel and outside it a sharper edge would help? Like this: [link]

"I marked the entrance on my map" Hmm, that sounds familiar.
<insert SkyrimCityGuardPlz here> I'll mark the location on your map.
*Map updated*
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconskyrimguardplz::iconspeechbubbleplz: "Let me show you where on your m-"
:iconfluttershystareplz::iconspeechbubbleplz: "I don't need your quests, I have enough already."

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Nameleslight Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconclapplz: That made me laugh more than it should.
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Thejboy88 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012
Sweet.
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks
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SwoonStar Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012
At first, I was like "Is Fluttershy the one selling stuff?" Then, After I read the story is was like "Oh, nevermind."
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That's a bit of a fail on my part, I guess I didn't make it clear enough.
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Karach0s Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012
So it turns out that only ponies mysteriously disappeared from Equestria. Cows, sheep, Diamond Dogs, maybe even mules are left intact, but only Diamond Dogs managed to create something resembling a society of thugs?
Sir, you will have a lot of explaining to do. :D

Still, it was mighty courageous (or stupid) of the Diamond Dogs to attack the only pony who survived and apparently gifted with the power to scare others just by staring at them. :)

"In the back of my mind, I could *here* a voice" <- surely you meant "hear". ;)
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm tired, I was bound to screw up somewhere. I'll correct make note of it and correct it tomorrow while I'm revising the whole thing with a fresh pair of eyes.

And yes, I have a lot of explaining to do. What I've dubbed "The Elements Arc" will explain it. All I need to do it simply decide on how I want to draw them, and then start getting them done. Maybe I could work them into this month's challenge.

In fact, tomorrow's sketch could be of the first part of that "arc".
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Karach0s Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012
I'm sure we all can't wait for it. :)
But give yourself some rest first. It's not good to strain yourself like that. ;)
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'll try not to.
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MegaPatron Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012
the power of the stare!. I hope flutters is ok next scene D:
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't want to use the Stare very often, but considering the fact that she's been watching a group of Diamond Dogs plunder her homeland and steal whatever they wanted, the usage here was justified. I can't help but think that it feels a little bit like Fluttershy assassinating them with hidden blades, only with non-lethal stares. :S
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MegaPatron Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012
lmao assassins creed :V
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The part where the guards surround her and draw their weapons when she makes a move to her saddlebags is funny in my head, because I hear Tobuscus saying "Act like you didn't do it. They're not buying it."

Also, attempting to "blend in" wouldn't work either, unless she's very good at faking a Wisconsin accent and disguising herself as a cow xD
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MegaPatron Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012
oh god you watch Tobuscus to? XD
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
My brothers do, and I like his comical videos such as the literal trailers.

His Let's Plays... not so much. He is infuriatingly stupid at the worst of times in some games, a genre savvy gamer he is not.
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MegaPatron Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012
lol XD i like the literal commercials to :P
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