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Survivor Shy - A Bit of Kindness by Mattatatta Survivor Shy - A Bit of Kindness by Mattatatta
"I thought I was prepared for my second visit to Canterlot. I had made a mental checklist Twilight would've been impressed with, and made a plan with a clearer goal than the first one I had when I cluelessly climbed the road to Canterlot. With nightmares keeping me from sleep, and not wanting to dwell on them like how my parents told me, I used the extra time wisely.

"Honestly, what I did have as a plan took no more than a few hours to make. What kept me in and around the Everfree Forest for a couple of days was gathering food and water for the journey, and putting away what reservations I had about looting things I desperately needed. Zecora's hut was now missing a few medicines and brews, and a copy of Supernaturals was also absent. At the time, I told myself that the book would be useful for when I can't sleep, and as I slinked through the ruins of Canterlot, trying to avoid the Dragons and Diamond Dogs still fighting all throughout the city, I kept on telling myself just that.

"'At least I left an apology note behind.' I thought to myself as I passed through a burnt-out shop.

"I pressed up against a wall, beside a doorway looking out over a street. The room I was in was once a jeweller's, it had been robbed of its wares long ago, and the raiders had left behind nothing but shattered glass. At some point, a Dragon had caught the building on fire, leading to the smoke-filled and leaning structure the shop had now become. It hurt to see Canterlot like this, in an even worse state now as it was when I had left it no more than four days ago. There may not have been much damage when... when the shockwave crashed my train, leaving only a small number of towns and hills scorched and lifeless in its wake, the transformation Canterlot had undergone in the weeks that followed was jarring. The Diamond Dogs and Dragons had simply flocked here like scavengers and began picking away at a body until there was nothing left but bone.

"I shuddered as the image flashed across my mind of vultures eating a dead animal. Even to a pony like me, there were some parts of nature that I simply didn't want to think about if I could help it.

"I peered out into the street, checking to see if the coast was clear. I could hear fighting a long way away, but this part of the city seemed to be abandoned, already searched and stolen from.

"I began to trot outside when a great, big Dragon flew directly overhead, scaring me back indoors. It banked off to the right and breathed fire over a part of the city, before coming around and landing near to where its flames had taken hold, well away from me.

"I darted outside and went in the opposite direction of it, making sure it wouldn't spot me. I checked behind to see if the Dragon was coming after, even though its attention was clearly on something else that was throwing spears at it than on me. I breathed a sigh of relief, and turned toward the street I was now on. I let out a muted 'eep' as I stopped myself from screaming.

"No more than twenty hooves away from me was a Hound, sitting down against a wall, with one of its bulky arms rested on the floor while the other was carefully resting over his chest. His eyes were locked onto mine. In an instant, he began to spring up to attack, and I froze in place and closed my eyes, only to hear him gasp for air and sound like he tripped over.

"I cautiously opened one of my eyes to peek, and I saw the Hound laying on the road, breathing raggedly and covering his chest with an arm while being aware of his own claws. He slowly rose up, growled at me, and started backing away.

"Something was wrong. And against my own instinct to flee, I followed him, but I kept my distance.

"The hound growled at me again, bearing his teeth while limping himself backwards, his chest. I noticed that he was dropping gold coins and other looted valuables from ripped pockets, and didn't seem to care.

"'Are you... Are you hurt?' I gently spoke, barely hearing myself over my heartbeats. 'Do you need help?' I wasn't sure what to expect, I wasn't even sure if this kind of Diamond Dog could speak, I knew what I was doing was dangerous, but I was sure he was in pain.

"The Hound stopped where he was, surprised at first, but then he scowled at me. 'I don't need help from puny pony who runs into forest like scaredy cat!'

"I suddenly recognised him, it was the same Hound I had seen in Ponyville and in my house.

"The Hound stood on his hind legs for a moment to flex his arms. 'I'm strong! My hurt will go away! Stupid Gryphon can't keep me down!'

"Griffins? I didn't understand. But before I could ask, he turned his back to me and started going down the street. I hurried up and caught up with him, settling a little closer, but still far away enough to avoid his claws if he were to strike. Every step he took seemed to hurt him, but by the way he was trying to ignore it, I couldn't tell how much. I tried talking to him again. 'Um, excuse me, Mister Diamond Dog. I don't mean to be a bother, but what do you mean by a Griffin keeping you down?'

"He tried to sigh, but has breath was cut short and turned into a gasp. He cringed for a few seconds and then started to speak. 'Stupid Gryphon came down from the sky. Hit me really hard here.' He waved his left paw over his chest, taking care not to catch himself with his claws. "Then it took shiny necklace away and escaped before I could get claws on it. You happy? Now go away!" The hound stormed off, but didn't get very far before listing over to catch air through shallow breaths. I hurried over to his side, abandoning my sense, and pushed him back upright. I stepped back as he turned to look at angrily.

"'What you want... now?!' He demanded, still catching his breath. 'Can't you... just go.. away?! I must find... fellow... Dogs. They will... help.'

"I turned to my saddlebags and quickly pulled out a green bottle with a thick mixture inside. I had taken it from Zecora's, thinking I may need it for myself (the meeting with a Dragon on my first visit came to mind). On the bottle were two labels, one with writing, the other with a picture of a bone. The label read: 'Enaroot Bone Repair - Treats clean breaks and fixes fractures the size of a hair!'

"I put the bottle down by my hooves so I could speak. 'It looks like that mean Griffin has hurt your ribs. I have medicine here that can fix that quickly and make it stop hurting. But you need to take the medicine.'

"'Blech! I hate medicine! I don't need it!' He bellowed, and stormed off again. He cried out in pain as his outburst quickly caught up with him. I picked the bottle up by the cork and rushed over to him. I stumbled about as I held the bottle with my forehooves and yanked the cork out. I dropped the cork to floor, and while still struggling to keep my balance, tried to get him to take the medicine. Without a word, he swung his left arm and held his paw out, barely missing me with his claws, and grunted a 'fine' toward me. I dropped the bottle onto his paw and set my forehooves down on the ground, a small smile creeping onto my face.

"That expression quickly changed to concern as he drank it all down and tossed the bottle on the floor, shattering it. 'Oh my...' I hoped there wasn't a maximum dosage.

"'There. Now I get better, and pony leave me alone, yes?' He said bitterly.

"I nodded and smiled. 'Make sure you get plenty of rest, and you'll get better soon.'

"He looked away and grumbled, I took that as his way of forcing himself to say 'thank you'.

"'If you don't mind me asking, what is your name? I'm Fluttershy.'

"Before he could respond, I caught two shapes round the corner of the street. I looked to see what they were, and saw two Diamond Dogs looking at me. They started shouting 'Get away from him, pony!' and raised their spears as they charged for me. I yelped and took to the air, and two spears were thrown after me, but thankfully fell short as I ascended. I looked around the city for the Castle's towers, and quickly started flying toward them, dropping down to the streets once I was sure I had lost them, and so I wouldn't be spotted by any Dragons.

"I hid myself inside another burned-out building to get my breath back. I was surprised at myself for letting my guard down so easily. Especially near a Diamond Dog that has been looting from Ponyville and now Canterlot, and even chased me off into the Everfree Forest. But, even after all of that considered, I couldn't have just left him in pain and unable to defend himself, not with all the Dragons flying around. All I could hope for was that that bit of kindness wouldn't come back to haunt me.

"I shook my head to clear the thoughts away, I was losing my focus again. I had to get back to Canterlot Tower, where I had last seen the Elements of Harmony, and search for them. The less time I spent getting there, the sooner I could find them, and that meant I could get out of Canterlot sooner.

"I checked outside to be sure it was safe, and ran off into the streets, heading for the Castle's grounds."


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I also took way too long with this.

It's about time I got a new update done, blame my laziness, I do. But at least this scene marks an important point in my progress, as it now allows me to pretty go wherever I please in the storyline and create a scene. But let's not forget the voting thing I started before I finished this. I've collected the tallies, and the winning option is Number 3: The Prologue option! This means that I shall begin working on the Prologue scene next, and get it out as soon as I can. Are you excited to have the Prologue finally coming? You should be. Option 4: The follow-up scene for 'Applejack' was only one point behind, so I'll most likely do that after I've made the Prologue scene.

Anyway, this particular scene was a challenge. I resketched it a few times (which you can see on my Tumblr) because the early sketches were horrible. I'm hoping that this scene is very interesting, because of how much time I spent sketching it until I was happy with it. I enjoyed drawing Fluttershy, if only because I had the perfect excuse to draw a bellybutton on her (they're just cute when drawn on the ponies, okay?), and also have an interesting pose to work with. I hope to one day get good enough at drawing poses to not spend days merely sketching and reworking them, but baby steps.

As for the write-up. I was honestly stumped on how to write for this scene. I knew what I wanted to happen, but it was a challenge to put it all together and not sound stupid, while also being pretty tired. I'm sorry if you catch any errors, and I'll fix them if you report them.

Finally, be sure to tell me what you think! I use feedback as a fuel source, because fizzy drinks, chocolate milk, and Sunny D are seriously lacking in the inspiration department for me. So be sure to leave your comments below!
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Zebralover214 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2015
cool fluttershy
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Navi22 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
amazing! 
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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Navi22 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
you're welcome!
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IwuvWoona Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm very interested. Could you tell me the first one?
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The story to go with this? Sure, you can find the current fanfic for the entire story over on FimFiction. Unlike here on dA, the fanfic is more organised and easier to follow. The only real downside with the FimFiction version is that is isn't entirely caught up with here. For example, I'm actually writing the full chapter that this scene takes place in for FimFiction. Plus there'e the "non-canon" scenes on my gallery that are simply not going to be used in there current state.

So again, you find a more complete version of the story over on FimFiction [link]
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IwuvWoona Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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ACEnBEAKY Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
I like how the slightly different look of your style gives a different feeling. Like I take it seriously without it trying to hard to be dark. It's not trying to be dark, just serious. And Shy's red band makes me think of something from Red Dawn crossed with Innocent Venus.
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Since I started drawing fanart, I've been trying to stay close to the show's style as best as I can. But at the same time, as a beginner artist, I took liberties and drew things a little differently so that I could learn more.

Survivor Shy's 'default' art style is essentially the FiM style, but with my mind adding and altering certain parts of it to make it easier for me to draw, make it entertain me more, and also step around details that bother me (Fluttershy's inconsistent mane for example).

So I can see where you're coming from when you say the style conveys a more serious tone while not being dark. I've never actually made a conscious effort to make it like that, but I'm glad it is that way. The story associated with these images is meant to sit very close to canon, and also maintain a certain level of acceptable content. I personally don't wish to draw grimdark things, I'm not interested in drawing death or gore or just being dark for the sake of it, because it's cheap.

Fluttershy's red band has very little symbolic meaning in my mind. I only created it for a practical purpose and to immediately indicate that Fluttershy is in a very setting from her usual canon setting. But, it is an important part of "Survivor" Fluttershy's appearance, so perhaps it serves as a symbol for the story as a whole. Without it, Fluttershy is really only Fluttershy with a scraggy mane, not a pony being pushed to survive, and later pushing back.
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ACEnBEAKY Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
To me a red band around the head can symbolize relating to war, but not necessarily warrior. I mean I see it on Rambo, but I also see it on some other characters that are usually in a freedom fighter role who have their people's welfare and peace on their mind...and it shows that unlike other terrorists, they're not trying to take from their enemies to provide for their own people, who they die for loosely and not on an individual basis, but simply to over throw what takes from thier people, and to make an environment that's relatively safe and peaceful so that they can live in peace and happiness, but not necessarily power and perfection.
To me, I've heard that red symbolizes passion, your basic needs and even love, but often gets mired in it's own aggressiveness. So, it has to be placed at the bottom of the totem pole, often.
The fact that Shy wears a little red on her head symbolizes that even though she's not aggressive, she has a compassionate understanding for people's basic human needs, and will look past them being an @$$hole to provide it. Somebody or something else can dispense justice, later.
That was a nice lunch break. TTFN!
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It seems that the band's colour is very applicable for Fluttershy's journey and ultimate goal in this story. Kinda scary, actually, just how many connections can be made between the symbolism of the colour red, and Fluttershy's actions and feelings throughout the planned storyline, especially since I never planned any of that.

Here, she's being kind to a creature whose kind is looting from and battling in Canterlot. If it were any pony else from even the Mane 6, they wouldn't consider nursing the hound back to health first. They'd get information first, then offer aid. Fluttershy, however, is naturally compassionate, and the welfare of even someone who is technically a foe takes priority.

Fluttershy's patience does wear down later in the story, as she watches large gangs of Diamond Dogs steal from ruins that she considers to be the equivalent to grave sites, she feels hurt. It angers her, to the point that she storms into the Diamond Dogs' underground city, using her Stare to intimidate any who get in her way.

It's obvious that I believe that Fluttershy is very passionate deep down, but she keeps it under wraps in fear of hurting others. But when she snaps, she has a hard time controlling herself,. The sudden change from the quiet, kind pony she normally is, to an unstoppable flurry of righteous anger is quite striking, but also likely to land her in greater trouble. She's a very good example of the symbolic nature of the colour red. Her kindness and empathy is unmatched, but such passion and love can drive her to anger if those she cares about are threatened or wronged, and that anger, fueled by raw emotion, is far more dangerous than any other anger. It's irrational, it's been suppressed for a long time, and it can leave her devastatingly empty inside if she lets it burn every last shred of emotion she has.
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dempsey23 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
Kindness amidst chaos, Fluttershy stays true.
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karkovice1 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
The diamong dog looks like he's having a heart attack.
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The cuteness is too much for him! Either that, or his ribs are busted.
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karkovice1 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
Hmmm... To me, it looks more like :iconhnnnngplz:
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Canon wise, his ribs are fractured.

Point-and-giggle wise, he is succumbing to the cuteness overload of Fluttershy hopping around on her hind legs while trying to pull the cork out of a bottle.

I find the latter funnier, even though it's slightly more lethal
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Karach0s Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
"I was surprised at myself for letting my guard down so easily."
Well, I was not. ;) You see, some may think this scene is of less significance because it supposedly doesn't have much to do immediately with the main plot. It's just a random encounter, right? Wrong! Think that and you would be dead wrong! Because this magnificent scene portrays the 100%-show-accurate Fluttershy we all know and love. It clearly shows that despite all the tragedy, missing ponies, and all that jazz you whipped up, Fluttershy is still the kind, gentle, and timid pony we know. She's the friggin' Element of Kindness, for Celestia's sake! How could she turn a blind eye on the hurting Hound?

*whew* Let me calm down a bit... I have seen quite a few stories which suffered greatly from the wrong characterization (heck, I even wrote one :D ). And for what you did here, good sir, reminding us of the good ol' Fluttershy, you deserve huge amounts of respect and a lot of kudos. :) Truly, it couldn't have been done better and at a better time.

Also, those Supernaturals... I have a nagging feeling this book will play a vital part in the story sooner or later. ;) You mention it far too often. :D
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, thanks! And here I was fearing that I was losing my touch. I spent about two hours writing this chapter and rewriting a lot of it as I went along. It's the longest write-up yet, sitting at about 1,700 words. I was beginning to worry that I had lost my touch and wound up rambling, or had messed up the dialogue (save for the conscious use of both "Griffin" and "Gryphon"), so thanks for blowing those concerns out of the water!

I wanted to make a scene that shows Fluttershy trying to force herself to quickly adapt to the clearly more dangerous world her, and it naturally not work out. Fluttershy explains that she decided to try to draw inspiration from Twilight and make a plan, and make a better effort to stay alert and rational, only for it to pretty much be abandoned the moment Fluttershy encounters someone in pain who needs help - even if they are dangerous and refusing help.

The simple reason this happens is because Fluttershy isn't Twilight, she doesn't have the personality or mindset that makes Twilight an organised and often practical pony (and have a potential to appear cold to onlookers if the stress of post-catastrophe Equestria hardens her). And trying to force oneself to change in no time at all, and change into something one is not, always results in failure. Fluttershy will simply have to slowly learn and adapt her way as time passes, and by using the skills she does possess.

If it were Twilight in the situation with the Diamond Dog, she would've probably left the Diamond Dog alone rather than pester it more, but that would also greatly influence her experience in the story, since action and even inaction has consequences, but I digress.

I simply love being able to foreshadow and cock Chekhov's Guns in virtually every scene I draw and write for, regardless of where it occurs in the actual storyline. I don't quite know how one of Chekhov's Guns can technically "fire" before it is "cocked" chronologically without in-universe time travel, but I'm basically doing just that, it's quite funny.

There is a significance to the Supernaturals book, I think it's minor, but it will play a role at some point in the story. Until then, it makes a good pillow, and a good foundation for world-building :)
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Karach0s Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
You're welcome. And you deserve it. :)

I have heard of the foreshadowing rule and unnecessary story elements before, but have not known the term of Chekhov's Gun. We live and learn (and yet die fools, as my friend often says :P ).
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well Chekhov's Gun is basically what you said before typing the phrase out. It's an example of foreshadowing, and refers to a gun being shown in the first Act of a play, therefore confirming it will go off in a later Act. It was originally a warning against unnecessary story elements, where Chekhov said to never put a loaded gun in the story if it isn't going to be used. If it won't be used, then don't put it there.

Nowadays it is also interpreted to define where something seemingly insignificant is introduced in an early scene, and it becomes very important to the plot in a later scene. I'm not a professional writer, this is my first serious fanfic in fact, but I believe I'm using the tool correctly. There's probably going to be a few that won't have as much of a big bang as others though. Some will have minor roles such as maintaining continuity while keeping readers entertained, and more subtle uses shall hopefully have a much bigger impact, since they make very big influences on the storyline.

Also, thanks to TvTropes, I've found that Survivor Shy is being told in Anachronic Order, and I'm using Futureshadowing when I cock a Chekhov's Gun after the event that fires it chronologically.

I barely made it out of that site with my sanity and afternoon intact.
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Karach0s Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Pretty much what I'd read in Wikipedia prior to posting my earlier reply. :D That's why I mentioned learning something. ;)

And yeah, I have to read some more of the TvTropes someday too. ;)
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TechZeroPyro Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
Nice to see 'Shy is making some friends. Aside from Spike.
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's funny how she found a friend among a society that simply does not like her, but she's like that lol
I'm hoping to bring that particular character back into the story in the future.
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MegaPatron Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
Lovely part! :D
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks, anything you like in particular?
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MegaPatron Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
honestly, I liked the part where she helps out the diamond dog. The kindness really gets to me and makes me happy
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Good :) I wanted to make a scene showing that Fluttershy is still Fluttershy, even in the setting she is currently in.
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OBLadin Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
From the picture alone, it looks like the Diamond Dog is having a heart attack from looking at Fluttershy with her adorable headband.
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I know, I find it funny to look at it that way :D
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TheMusicBrony Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
This is Amazing! :D
Nice work!
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks very much! I hope you're enjoying the entire series!
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zaiali Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
Even when they want to kill her, Fluttershy, being the saint she is, helps them. Nice work.
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you, I'm hoping to explore the Diamond Dog's city in the near future. It's gonna be fun when I get around to it!
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SonicSatamX93 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Student Writer
Nice job.

This is pretty well drawn art.
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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SonicSatamX93 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome
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sapphire475gs Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
Will be waiting on a Gryphon (or Griffin, you spelled it differently when Fluttershy said it) encounter later, perhaps... though that "shiny necklace" could have been anything. How fitting if it was the Element of Loyalty ending up in the hands of a sentimental Gilda....
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I didn't think anyone would notice that I used two variations of the word "Gryphon". I deliberately used "Gryphon" because I feel that Diamond Dogs probably put emphasis on the "y" in the way they are shown to speak. Why they would spell it the original way against "Griffin" or "Griffon" I think is down to old books and habit. As a society, they seem to be pretty close-knit, and probably only have old, dusty books on the rarely-seen creatures.

Ponies, on the other hand (hoof), keep very current on the world they live in, and are very social. So the creation and adoption of different spellings would be more common and accepted. The show itself may have used "Griffon" in the title of an episode, but phonetically, it's the same as "Griffin", and since the majority of people (and I assume ponies) spell a word based on how they hear it, the 'i' variant is possibly more common in writing.

Useless analysis is magic! I'm sure my brain power could've been spent elsewhere on the story, but I'm just awkward like that!
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sapphire475gs Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
Useless analysis is magic... and magic is cool regardless! Thanks for the insight!
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DarthWill3 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very cute!
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks
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DarthWill3 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome!
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nasc2 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
Hey !
I noticed new link today - you released it on fimfiction ! :)
(yes, I'm slowpoke, it seams that it was released month ago)
What do you think about submitting to EQD now ? ;)

Wonderful chapter as always, btw :)
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
As a fanfic submission, Survivor Shy is not ready. As it stands right now, I reckon it is too scattered for a lot of the EqD crowd to have patience for. I'm also not even half way done overall. There's plenty to cover with Fluttershy's first faltering steps, for one thing. There's basically a good number of characters to introduce at different parts of the story, more world-building, more 'situations' ranging from external threats to internal conflicts, and let's not forget the ending - and I'm just being broad and vague.

I decided that it would be best for Survivor Shy to be in it's final dozen scenes before I submit it to EqD's pre-readers, maybe even re-order everything into order as it would be no mystery how things go, by then.

I really need to start working my way through this story...
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nasc2 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
Well, I still think that non-chronological order is a large part of 'Survivor Shy' charm, and it seams that several comments at fimfiction agree with me.
Anyway it is up to you to decide when and how it should be submitted.
Just do not forget to announce here and at fimfiction (it seams you already have fanbase there :) when it is published at EQD, so your fans (including me) could come and upvote it there :)
btw I think it might be a good idea to directly ask your watchers here who have fimfiction account to give like at fimfiction, more likes/favs - more chances to get it featured. I read that there is some number of likes per day after reaching which story can get featured (or automatically gets featured? I could not recall clearly, sorry).
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I do agree that there is a certain unique quality to the series thanks to the very scattered narrative. But I do feel concerned that it'll start to hurt the series further down the line. There's twenty-five chapters on FimFiction, supported by the twenty-six pictures in the Survivor Shy Gallery, and I haven't even reached a halfway point. The series will probably end up with 60+ scenes alone by the time I'm finished. That's a lot of chapters to greet a new reader with, especially if they're all out of order and appear to be disorganised.

That's why I'm thinking that I'll place the finished chapters in order when I start drawing the ending scenes. "Sirt, Stry urd Syche" is clearly the latest-occurring scene in the storyline that is available right now, and it is clear that it takes place moments before the climax. Reordering the entire story up until that point would not only make the story easier to follow and less daunting for new readers, but it would also make sure that every reader had a solid foundation to go from. With every part of Fluttershy's story now arranged in the correct order, readers will be prepared and ready to follow Fluttershy to the final handful of scenes and be able to understand everything that happens.

As for getting people to visit FimFiction to vote the story up and such. I may nowadays simply give people the link to Fimfiction whenever they show interest in Survivor Shy, rather than bombard them with alternative links to dA and Tumblr, but I don't want to force my story out there and get a bunch of people to vote the story up. I'd rather just let that happen naturally, so I'd know I'm getting honest votes rather than empty ones. A good story shall earn it's followers and keep them, and I'd rather keep it like that, because it'll help me ensure that I maintain a high quality for the story.
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nasc2 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
>Reordering the entire story up until that point would not only make the story easier to follow and less daunting
>for new readers, but it would also make sure that every reader had a solid foundation to go from. With every part >of Fluttershy's story now arranged in the correct order, readers will be prepared and ready to follow Fluttershy to
>the final handful of scenes and be able to understand everything that happens.
But what if there will be readers who would appreciate original unsorted order and feeling that it gives ?
What about providing alternative ?
For example you could publish original unsorted index as intro chapter with comment that reader can read it in original order or in chronological. Or you can instead leave chapter order intact and publish chronological index as chapter at some point - for reader to refresh old chapters in memory (especially for those of us who is following Survivor Shy from early moments) and check if his vision is correct. In last case you can mention chronological index as alternate in description for those who do not like puzzles.
btw there is comment at fimfiction that reading in unchronological order feels like you are reading some old journal which lost binding and is unsorted bunch of pages now. Or notes as author of that comment said. I just want to add that I have similar feeling too. Kinda wrapping for whole unsorted order conception in my mind.

As to the votes - I am sorry if I offended you in any way. I did not mean any cheating. I just wanted to tell that some of your followers here could have ff account and I thought about asking them to go and vote for the story which they are already watching and obviously like. Or simply mentioning something like 'hey! we are at ff now!'. I for example usually mechanically skip alternate links while reading and you got my like and fav only yesterday, sorry :(
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Mattatatta Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
There's no harm in suggesting, and I have been posting links to FimFiction here and generally attempting to notify followers so that they can choose to use a site that has story tracking rather than rely on going through heaps of deviations a day. But trying to amass a personal army for the sole purpose of boosting ratings and views strikes me as a bit sneaky. Whatever needs to happen will happen eventually, I don't want to force it.

About reordering, I might try using an introductory chapter to act as a quick directory and explanation. I did consider doing this so I can place a link at the bottom of each chapter that jumps to the next chronological scene, instead of using FimFiction's chapter selection, which are still unsorted.

It'll take extra time to format and iron out linking issues, but since it is looking like I'll have to take the story down in order to reorder chapters or insert a new chapter right at the start, I won't be spendng more time anyway.
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nintendofreak768 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
8D an update. but alas i must sleep D;
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SilverRattler Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"No more than twenty hooves away from me was a Hound, sitting down against a wall, with one of it's bulky arms rested on the floor while the over was carefully resting over his chest. "

that bolded word should say "other". haha

This is fun, but I can't finish reading tonight. sleeeeeeeep
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